The Toilet was Clogged

Mar 15, 2019 05:47
The Toilet was Clogged

I have visited Washington D.C. to attend an academic conference.

And I have stayed at a hotel near the Walter E. Washington Convention Center, but I had big trouble this morning.

The toilet in my room was clogged.

I might have used too much toilet paper.

As a last resort, I called the front desk and said "Excuse me. The toilet in my room is blocked. Can someone come and fix it?"

The front desk clerk said "Okay," but no one came to my room for a while, so I left five dollars as a chip and headed to the conference venue.

I would like to be more careful in the future.
トイレが詰まった

私は今、学会参加のためワシントンD.C.に来ています。

そしてコンベンションセンター近くのホテルに泊まっているのですが、今朝大きなトラブルがありました。

トイレが詰まったのです。

トイレットペーパーを多く使いすぎたのかもしれません。

仕方がないのでフロントに電話して "Excuse me, the toilet is clogged. Can someone come and fix it?" と修理をお願しました。

フロントの従業員は "Okay" と言いましたが、しばらく待っても人が来なかったので、5ドルのチップを置いて学会会場に向かいました。

次からは気をつけたいです。
No. 1　xMichaelx's correction
  • I have visited Washington D.
  • I am visiting Washington D.
  • C.
  • This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!
  • to attend an academic conference.
  • This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!
  • And I have stayed at a hotel near the Walter E.
  • And I am staying at a hotel near the Walter E.
    　Or "I have been staying at..."
  • Washington Convention Center, but I had big trouble this morning.
  • Washington Convention Center, but I had a lot of trouble this morning.
    　or "I have a big problem"
  • The toilet in my room was clogged.
  • This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!
  • I might have used too much toilet paper.
  • This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!
  • As a last resort, I called the front desk and said "Excuse me.
  • As a last resort, I called the front desk and said, "Excuse me.
  • The toilet in my room is blocked.
  • This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!
  • Can someone come and fix it?"
  • This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!
  • The front desk clerk said "Okay," but no one came to my room for a while, so I left five dollars as a chip and headed to the conference venue.
  • The front desk clerk said, "Okay." However no one came to my room for a while, so I left five dollars as a tip and headed to the conference venue.
    　It's better to only connect two sentences at a time when writing.
  • I would like to be more careful in the future.
  • I need to be more careful in the future.
Toru
Thank you so much for the correction! :)
No. 2　jeemeegee's correction
  • I have visited Washington D.
  • I have visited Washington D.
  • to attend an academic conference.
  • This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!
  • And I have stayed at a hotel near the Walter E.
  • And I have stayed at a hotel near the Walter E.
  • Washington Convention Center, but I had big trouble this morning.
  • Washington Convention Center, but I had big problem this morning.
  • The toilet in my room was clogged.
  • The toilet in my room was clogged up.
  • I might have used too much toilet paper.
  • This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!
  • As a last resort, I called the front desk and said "Excuse me.
  • As a last resort, I called the front desk and said "Excuse me.
    　"As a last resort" means that you have tried other ways to fix the problem but was unsuccessful. So, it makes sense to write something about what you did to solve the problem before this sentence. :)
  • The toilet in my room is blocked.
  • The toilet in my room is clogged up.
  • Can someone come and fix it?"
  • This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!
  • The front desk clerk said "Okay," but no one came to my room for a while, so I left five dollars as a chip and headed to the conference venue.
  • The front desk clerk said "Okay," but no one came to my room for quite a while. So I left five dollars as a tip and headed to the conference venue.
  • I would like to be more careful in the future.
  • This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!
Here's one way of rewriting this:

I am currently in Washington D.C. for an academic conference and staying at a hotel near the Walter E. Washington Convention Center. This morning, I ran into a big problem: the toilet in my room got clogged up. I might have used too much toilet paper. I tried to fix the problem a few times but failed, and so I called the front desk and said, "Excuse me. My toilet is clogged up. Can someone come and fix it?". The clerk replied, "Okay." After waiting for quite some time, nobody came to fix the toilet. So I left $5 as a tip and headed to the conference venue. I should be more careful next time.

Good job! :)
Toru
Thank you so much for the corrections and rewriting!
That's very helpful! :)
jeemeegee
You're welcome!
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